for my luvly VEx

[joker]

i can't hide my feelings from you for all time
i don't want to lie myself no more
i really want to tell you the truth
when i tell you the truth....
.................
................

now i can only say and feel that......

only you can makes me smile
n
you 'r the one can makes me cry
just now....i feel a thousand knifes in my heart
but now.....i can't feel my heart no more
maybe this time god 'nt let me be with you
but i ain't give up
you...always be in my heart till i end my journey​

luv u​

ini buatan gue yang pertama...sory klo jelek..

 

[CR4Y]

It's not really a poem i guess. Kamu cuma tulis sajak doang. Kurang menyentuh. Tolong jangan tersinggung ok. Ini cuma kritik dan saranku. Aku beri kamu masukan untuk cari kata2 yang akhirnya berbunyi sama
No flame bro /sry kalau menyinggung

Ray

 

[joker]

ohh..gpp..ini kan buatan pertama..jadi sory banyak salah2 nya...hehehe...laen kale gue coba laghe deh...

gue nga gampang tersinggung koq...hehehe...

 

[penghancur_emperium]

tapi mayan bagus kok... /heh

 

[CR4Y]

Gpp kok. Ntar juga nambah pasti. Kalau mau liat puisi2ku bisa aja liat di blogku

Ray